Vanessa The Baby Thief of Teenaged Girls

Long ago in Romania 1928 there was a girl named Vanessa Romania.

Vanessa was your average teen who only wanted love that her father was never able to give her because he disappeared after Vanessa mother (Eleanor) and he had got into an argument. (The neighbors recall hearing Ms.Romania say she wish he would disappear and after the door slammed there were screams, not normal screams either, Ms. Eleanor thought nothing of it but in the morning awoken to scratches and lots of blood in the living room. Ms. Eleanor was the only suspect do to the lack of evidence.) Vanessa learned about the birds and the trees and was with every boy looking for love to replace the empty hole in her heart. Everyone in the town knew and she was shamed and called horrible things such as sluts, whores, hoes, and prostitutes. It got even worse when Vanessa became pregnant and didn’t know who the father was . She tried to tell her mother but Ms. Eleanor couldn’t care less for the fact such shame was brought to her family name. Vanessa vowed to do her very best to raise her child with out letting her past haunt the child. One day as Vanessa was walking home and a couple of girls thought it would be fun to taunt and mess with Vanessa they called her the usual names. But Vanessa showed no reaction, they then began hitting Vanessa in her stomach repeatedly. One girl then picked up a stick and hit Vanessa across her head causing her to lose consciousness. The girls took turns kicking her unconscious body then spat on her and walk away. Three days later Vanessa was found and awoken in a strange cabin she seen a blanket that was bloody. She slowly unwrapped the blanket and seen her 16th week miscarried baby. Vanessa just screamed and cried she was un functional for 2 months. She was in really bad state of depression and killed herself she vowed to haunt every teenaged girl whose pregnant and cause them to have a miscarriage. She takes the kids from the soon to be parents to replace her child.

  • Amber Izer

    Why is her last name the same as the country she is from? What reason did the girls have for beating her into having a miscarriage? Why would her ghost want to harm all teen moms and not just go after the girls who hurt her?

    • D.Thomas

      Good questions, well I didn’t go way into the background because I don’t know if I will continue with this story, but the Romania’s actually had ancestors that found Romania and were known for strange disappearancs and curses for the land of which they built Romania was cursed which is why Mr. Romania disappeared and why Vanessa had a miscarriage. The girls beaten her to have a miscarriage because Vanessa showed no reactions to what they normally called her so they decided to literally hit her where it hurts, therefore taking her baby from her after deciding she would just give her child a better life then the one she had. She takes every teen moms baby because she want there baby to be the replacement of the one she lost and also because the whole town judged her for not only having s*x but also getting pregnant and no one wanted nothing to do with so she just took every teen baby so their hopes and spirits would be crushed just like hers was.

      • Amber Izer

        These are very good explanations. If you can somehow work this information into your story, it would be much better. You have a great idea here. Don’t give up. Keep trying to do better. Remember, detail is the key to a great story.

        • D.Thomas

          Thank you for the advice and I will. 🙂

  • Ernest Cantu

    Some grammatical errors but all in all, I really enjoyed this urban legend sort of story

    • D.Thomas

      Thank you, for letting me know about the corrections that are needed and for reading this story. I literally made it up as I wrote it.