The Gruesome Death of My Friend

This is short, yes, but I am in a lot of trouble right now so do excuse me. My friend was related to Adolf Hitler. She was bullied a lot for being related to the most evil man in history, but I stand up for her. Her name was Mella she was really nice and she cared about a lot of people even the people who bullied her. Forgive me if this story is a little fuzzy this happen to me about 10 years ago I just need to someone people what to Mella.

I was in my middle school year and me and my best friend were friends with Mella. Well she acted a little weird sometimes we never really took that into mind. Most people would molk and judge her because her last name was Hitler we never did though. Mella always took a liking to us and would always tell us some deep and dark things.

Mella always told us that she never really thought of herself like her uncle he was a great great uncle and Mella would hate to even say her own last name, it was sad. Eventually she began to very strange things. Not really bad, until she started talking to herself. Mella spoke fluent german because that’s all her parents spoke.

One day whale me and my other friend (who we’ll call Sophie) were talking, Milla mumbled something. “Er kommit für mich.” was what I could make out before she got up and left, without saying bye or anything which was highly unlike Milla. It was strange but I decided to ignore it.

Come the next day me and sophie were talking and she told me something strange. “Jordan, do you remember what Milla said yesterday?” “Y-ya the german thing.” I replied. “Well, I looked it up on translate and it said that means, He’s coming for me.” I was shaken up but I didn’t let it bother me.

The next day, they found Milla in her house, dead. She had several bites taken out of her skin that came from a human. The police found some DNA and used it to run a test. The most disturbing part, the part that sticks with me and the part that haunts my dreams, after getting the tests back the tests read that the DNA was from Adolf Hitler.

  • Jeff the Killer

    Spelling and sentence errors, along with you spelling Mella in the beginning and then Milla in the end. Overall, your story needs some more work. Just keep writing and you’ll improve.

    • Maxire

      Thank you for that I appreciate your feed back

  • Puddin Tane

    2/5 stars. Your punctuation needs a lot of work as does your spelling. You also changed her name from Mella to Mills. How did you not catch that?