La Llorona

“Hey Daniel, did you bring the stuff?”

“Heck yeah, of course I did, Maria”

“Can you guy finally tell me where we are going now?”

“Fine, we’re going to the river.”

“Oh no… Oh nooo…The river is the last place you want to be!…”

“And why is that, Colin. Cmon you’re ruining the fun, and we have even got there!”

“Yeah, what’s the big deal?”

“It’s dangerous”

“We’re just going to hang at the edge. Make a tiny fire to roast s’mores.”

Going anywhere near the river is a bad idea.

“Why!?”

*sigh*

“Fine! But you have to let me finish until the end. Got it?”

*nods*

“Okay. Way back in the 1800s, there was a girl who fell in love with a rich man. As her family was poor, it gave her another reason to love him. One day the surprisingly asked to marry her. Months after the wedding he decided to join the military. He left so abruptly that she never had the confidence or the time to tell him she was pregnant with his baby.

While he was away, she gave birth, and it ended up being twins. She raised them with care, even if it was a struggle as here husband was away. He usually came for a week every several months, but it was never long. One day, when he came back, he said he didn’t love her any more. He was going to marry another woman he met when he was away. And he was taking the children with him.

They left that night. The mother was outraged. She made a plan to sneak to the mansion and take back her children. She managed to get there to find her children successfully, but when she came back, she knew the river would be a problem. She could cross it, but not with her children. The could barely swim. She decided to take a risk and went for it. She made it across with only one child. The other one had drowned.

She instantly became maddened with grief, and decided to drown the other. She then realized what had just done. But it was to late. She drowned herself to join them. She became a ghost, but she could not find her children.

She didn’t know she had to stay in the mortal world without her children. They’re souls were laid to rest. But the mother still looked for her children. So long, she forgot what they looked like. Now she haunts that very river, and she will take you if you go to near.”

“Hahhahah.!! Oh my gosh, Colin. You actually believe that story. I bet it’s just a story for little kids so they don’t go and drown.”

“But I-”

“Don’t be such a wimp.”

“I’m not going!!”

“Fine! Go back to your mom then. Let’s go, Maria.”

…THE NEXT DAY…

*the radio plays*

“TWO KIDS REPORTED MISSING AS OF YESTERDAY! TWINS MARIA AND DANIEL SMITH OF LA LLORONA! CALL 911 IF YOU ANY INFORMATION RELATED TO THERE DISAPPEARANCE! NOW FOR THE WEATHER…”

  • Puddin Tane

    Ari, you need to do this over. Your spelling and grammar are really bad. I can’t make heads or tales of this. You wrote this like you were on a deadline. It is clear you didn’t bother to proof read what you wrote. How can you expect anyone to enjoy this when they’re too busy correcting it as they go along?