Camping Trip

I just recently went on this camp and it was roughly like a 3 days and 2 night camp. It was kinda of those h******e survival camp where you had no sense of time and you had to be constantly awake all the time to put it simple as that. So, where the camp was sited was in a nearby jungle. Each group had 5 members and that we were all given utensils and food for our camp. There were no rules in the camp and that if one of members was injured or chicken out. We had to do those smoke signals to alarm out camp facilitator about our situation.

Fast forwarding to the second night of our camp, things started to get strange around dusk. Whereby one of my members notice something was lurking around the our campsite. But we brushed it off of an animal just wondering around. As it was dusk, my group decided we better be prepared for dinner. It was the most silent night in the jungle. But, somehow I felt uneasy about it as I felt something was just observing our movements from a far. I kept it for myself as we had a rule between the group that whatever unnatural things we notice it should be kept to ourselves to prevent paranoia in the group.

As time kept on passing by, that feeling of being observe kept pondering on my mind. Without waking up any of my group members, I took a fire torch and scouted the campsite by myself. It took me like about 10 minutes to look around the place and it clear of anything out of the ordinary. Right until the point, when I went back to my waken group mates and they all look shocked. They pointed at the bushes near our campfire and I notice an unusual dark figure taking form. Adrenaline kicked in and our nature response was make a run of it.

As soon as we were in a comfortable distance between the figure, we decided to connect out facilitator about what we had seen. We set up the smoke signal but nobody came to our help. So, we were now essentially lost in a dense jungle at night with a dark figure following us. We kept our minds together and tried finding our way out of this mess. We move South as we knew that there was a small town south of the jungle. We spent all night walking to that town while we had this feeling that the figure was still stalking us.

At the crack of dawn, we managed to find the town and informed the local sheriff about what had happened to us. It turns out that during that night, all of our other campers were found dead either by hanging or by being butchered. The sheriff reported that the kills was all done by a cult doing their rituals around the jungle and we were just unfortunate to be there as the same time they were. But, one thing which was a mystery was what was that dark figure which kept following us through the jungle ?

  • Suzie

    This was a awesome read, well done

  • Stephanie Reynolds

    It was an interesting concept, but there were a ton of grammatical errors, as well as awkward phrasing. It made it very difficult to read. Also, with the cult going around and killing everyone, it doesn’t seem like a stretch that the dark figure could’ve been one of them. Wasn’t very much suspense. It would have been scarier if they had found some of the other bodies and built the fear, possibly with a couple members of their own group being picked off, before ultimately finding the safety of town. Keep writing, you’re off to a great start!

  • Puddin Tane

    Your sentence structure needs work, there are numerous spelling errors. I suggest you read this aloud to yourself, slowly, so you can, really, hear what you wrote.

  • ShYgUy

    Way to rushed. Suspense needs to be built. I feel like you gave us cliff notes to a much longer story you wanted to write