Truly Cursed

Disclaimer: this is an idea I have for some short horror stories and just want to get some opinions on whether this is a good basis for some. Feel free to criticize and critique.

The world has changed. No more are the days of innocence and fun. The war made sure of that. The war and, more specifically, the bombs.

These new forms of explosives caused rapid and severe mutation in anyone and anything that came in contact with the liquid particles or inhaled its fumes. It spread like radiation, infecting our water and being carried by high altitude atmospheric winds. It seemed no one was safe. The outside world was uninhabitable, man and creature alike changing before our the eyes of anyone who witnessed the contact.

Sweet little creatures such as bunnies would become grotesque, hairless monsters, their spines contorting into strange angles, their legs growing long, claws sprouting from their feet. Their pale, yellow eyes bulging from their sockets and their teeth becoming rotten and jagged. These creatures would become so aggressive and deadly to anything that moved. It was a nightmare. And no living creature could escape similar fates. Plants and trees rot and decay within hours. Some types of trees mutate, becoming a type of incubator for strange diseases that cause flesh to melt from bones when disturbed. Men, women and children.. All becoming grotesque and hideous creatures knowing nothing but pain and suffering. I pity them. But not as much as I pity myself.

You see the horrible truth is everyone on earth, as far as I know, has suffered the same fate. Everyone but me. My wife… My children. I watched everyone I loved become Cursed. Only I was spared. I would kill myself, but God has a sick sense of humor. I get to watch my family become grotesque monsters, and I become, in a way, immortal. I put a gun in my mouth and pulled the trigger, And woke up some time later, unhurt. I jumped from the highest building I could find, 56 stories I think, and all that did was knock the wind out of me. I’ve tried cutting, stabbing, burning and crushing myself, all to no avail. I feel pain, but I cannot die. I need no sleep, food or water.

That was 3 years ago. When I gave up trying to die, I just started walking. I didn’t know where I was going or what I was looking for, but in all that time… In all the places I’ve seen, I haven’t ever seen a normal person, or creature. Every city and town I’ve walked through, there’s been nothing but decaying husks of what the world use to be, all filled with the lost souls of the Cursed wandering the streets attacking one another and tearing each other apart. I am completely and utterly alone. So maybe the cold, hard truth is that I am truly the one who is Cursed. I just hope I age. Only time will tell. But until then, I guess I will just keep walking. I don’t hope to find anyone alive. I hope the sun falls from the damn sky and demolishes this damn rock I’m cursed to walk.

  • MadisonAshley

    I like it so far, it has a good plot. I hope that he ends up finding someone that has the same problem so he wont be lonely but then again…it is creepypasta 😂❤

    • zakaryspinx

      Woops meant to reply not just comment lol. Check post plz lol

  • zakaryspinx

    Thank you! It feels good to know its liked in some respect. I really wanna capture the feeling of complete isolation and loneliness when i go further with it while creating a vivid and gruesome world.

    • MadisonAshley

      Well then you’ve reached your goal lol it gives some pretty good imagery good job and keep it up (:

      • zakaryspinx

        Thanks!

  • MissMe123

    It sounds a bit like the Fallout games, but not so much if you expanded on it that it’d be the sane thing. I’d like to see where you go with it.

    • zakaryspinx

      You know thats funny because my some else said the same thing. And i would be lying if i said things like fallout and metro 2033 werent an inspiration in my thought process. And anyone who knows of them cant help but think of them when seeing anything post apocalyptic. But what i hope to capture is something you dont feel when playing those amazing games: complete amd utter hopelessness. Thank you for your input and i will do my best to stand out and be unique and intriguing as possible in the future.

      • MissMe123

        I hope you know I didn’t mean to imply you were stealing their ideas. I can’t wait to see more of this story.

        • zakaryspinx

          Oh no i didnt take it like that all. Just you simply noting the similarities and feel of the scene i was creating. And Thank you!

          • MissMe123

            You’re welcome. =)

  • zakaryspinx

    Im glad you enjoyed it! 😀

  • dethevan o

    Cant wait for the full story ive been working on one and im about to start on another one so good luck to you

    • zakaryspinx

      Thank you very much. I just submitted a new story expanding on the grisly details of the loss of his family. Good luck to you as well in future!

  • zoe schader

    I think this creepypasta should have a twist in the end. I love the plot.

    • zakaryspinx

      Ahhhh good old twist endings. I myself am partial to a great revelation. But the end wasnt the end at all so maybe there will be. This was only a small fraction of this mans journey. 😉

  • R4bbit

    Its a good story

    • zakaryspinx

      Thank you

  • Ray Ramirez

    This is badass

    • zakaryspinx

      Thanks! Check out part 2! Its called truly cursed revisited