Bella the Killer

(I’m sorry if this makes no sense I was trying to get in mad man’s mind)

June 22, 2017

Hi I’m Lucas Manson and I’m writing this vlog for people to know about a strange woman met at a party.

It all started on a Friday a few weeks ago me friend Jackson invited me to his party. I thought it would be fun to take a break from my life and loosen up so I went. Later I found out it was a big mistake.

So anyway I’m at the party playing beer-pong and other drinking games then I seen her. I could have sworn she was the most beautiful woman there. So I go up to her and I ask her on a date.

Strangely she giggled and said, “You don’t even know my name.”

Well then what is your name? But instead of answering me sh just walked away. I thought it was nothing so I just continued having a great time. Later when I got home I just went straight to bed and I had this insane dream… well first I wake in my bed to someone singing a song it felt like something was telling me to go to the window by my bed, so I just walked to the window there was a woman across the street under the street light and I could have swore it was the woman I met at the party. She didn’t move she just stared at me. then I woke up it all seemed like it was so real.

September 1,2017

I can’t stand it she’s haunting me. Every time I close my eyes I see her… this time in my dream I got her name and it is Bella the killer. She is driving me insane… I don’t think I can take it any more.

September 2, 2017

I’m going to snap any second now. Oh yeah you should probably know about the dream I had last night. Once again I woke up to the same g******n song ,but it felt like I had no control over my own body and then… I went in my dresser and found a loose then I hung myself and then I woke up.

September 10, 2017

Um hi I’m Jessica I’m Lucas’s sister I’m a fared I have some terrible news… Lucas was found hung. The police have no idea who killed my brother. The only reason I’m posting this is a note he left me… well he wanted me to tell what happened to him and good-bye I swear when I find out who this sick b*****d is, I will kill it… and that is a promise.

( check out my other stories The devil’s child and  The misery)

  • Rose Morrison

    I’m sorry, this was dreadful. Terrible spelling and grammar, so whole sentences made no sense. No real storyline or plot to it, so again, no real sense of a narrative. Please have another go, you have a good idea here.

    • Manstein

      Lol i see you almost in every text rated under 3/5

      • Rose Morrison

        Hi there Manstein. I try to give constructive criticism to those who need it most, plus encouragement to keep writing. It can be tough if comments are rude or just negative, I try to be politely helpful.

  • Rebecca

    I liked it even though their were mistakes

  • Missing Toby

    No… Just… No…
    Okay I have a feeling that I might have an idea where you were trying to go with this but you used dates that haven’t even happened yet. You can’t post from the future, at least use days from the past month please, it is August of 2017 September hasn’t even come yet…
    I… I don’t believe I have anything else to say… No need to point out obvious mistakes considering how often I see the kind of grammar used in this story. Not to mention… Nothing… Really… Happened…
    Alright that’s it that’s all I have to say.

    • Puddin Tane

      You have never heard of futuristic events? C’mon. The writer is getting enough criticism without your lack of imagination. No one knows what could happen in the future. Do you have a crystal ball? I don’t. I wasn’t born with that ability. Not all of us were. Maybe in (her) world this does happen.

  • CreepypastaJack

    Lol guys i know that the 2 paragraphs say like the same thing its because i thought it deleted so i wrote it again 😅

  • Pika

    I liked it. Just try to watch your spelling and change the name a bit. See it as a general rule not to use “the killer” on any character. I’d say only the Jeff & Jane autor should be using it if he adds someone to the J & J storyline. Overall it’s good. I like the idea of a killer who haunts you and slowly takes control of you until she finally forces you to commit suicide. Make another story with that character and correct your mistakes tjis time ;).

  • Ana Lucia Gonzalez

    It made no sense at all…

  • Dray Oxendine

    Just write more you will get better over time 😎