The Love of a Sadist

Jane she is the most perfect girl for me she is nice she is lovely she is everything I needed it all started at.

At the neighborhood of (Unknown) a man named Luke Forrest he is very lonely and sad due to him being alone. One day he meet a new girl in town that just moved in her name is Jane Finbar age 25.

She became friends with Luke until one day she and Luke were talking.

“Um Jane I like you.”

“For real!?”

“Yeah for real.”

He then held her hand but she quickly pulled away and stood up.

“I’m sorry I have a boyfriend his name is Christian Friet.”

He then remembers this name. He was the bully that used to beat him up back at 1st grade until college Luke would never forget. She then walks away from him he thought everything is gonna be fine.

She started avoiding him she was like they never met before. She pretends he is invincible it causes something in him snap.

He was in the bathroom he heard a scream or was it a roar then he saw himself his eyes are red he then realized it wasn’t a reflection it was him. Then there was another one of him a white haired version of him he then told himself.

“THIS IS NOT REAL! I’M CRAZY!”

“No you are not crazy I’m Clyde and I’m your sadist part.”

“I’m Geno your Masochist side.”

Luke saw some blood spill out of Geno’s shirt.

“OH s**t sorry about that Its just I wanna die but I can’t cause your still Alive.”

Then they both stepped out of the mirror and Luke cannot believe it his counter parts are right in front of him.

“Why are you here?”

“To help you, I know you have problems with Jane we feel how you feel, you made us!”

“How can you guys help!?”

“We’ll be at the basement ask us what to do if you need to.”

He then went up his room washed his face and went down the basement and they were there so it is real he can’t be dreaming nothing has changed.

Next morning he saw Geno and Clyde eating. Clyde is eating Cookies and Geno is eating some cereal while watching “300” the movie.

He went to her to say sorry.

“Jane Hey Jane!”

“What is it?”

“Why are you staying away from me?”

“There is no us for you to care is there? Anyway I’m moving with Chris Goodbye!”

Then after she left walking fast, He became furios and barged in the door at the house.

“G******N IT!”

“Whtas wrong?”

“Seems he needs us Geno.”

“I can’t believe she is moving in with him!”

“Well you are pretty much screwed!”

“Shut up Geno! Damn it! He is not the one for her! HE IS A MEDLING B*****D! I AM THE ONE FOR HER I AM!”

“Well make her realize it.”

“Ugh! I JUST WANT HER TO LOVE ME.”

“The question is how about medling Chris!?”

“I WANNA BEAT HIM UP THROW HIM SOMEWHERE AND BREAK HIS ARMS AND JAW! I WANNA LEAVE HIM BROKEN AND EMPTY JUST LIKE HE DID IN THE PAST 17 YEARS!”

“YOU WANT TO KILL HIM!”

“THE HELL NO I CANT DO THAT!”

“Dont worry we’ll help you throw him in the lake after you f*****g stab his head and pull it down through his body!”

Luke agreed to this after that he went to Chris’ house and went to his bathroom and killed him he was crying. Luke then smiled and started stabbing him mercilessly.

“STOP IT! I SAID STOP CRYING YOU PEICE OF S**T JUST DIE ALREADY! DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE! DO IT! JUST DISAPPEAR ALREADY! JUST DIE!” he then took his body  to the next town and threw him to the lake there so no one in their town 90 km away would know so after the incident.

Tomorrow night Clyde, Geno, and Luke celebrated but someone was knocking it was Jane Ckyde and Geno hid at the basement again.

“HOW DARE YOU!”

“WHAT?”

“YOU HAVE SOMETHING TO DO WITH THIS!”

“WHAT ABOUT CHRIS?”

“HE IS DEAD OKAY AND YOU PROBABLY COULD HAVE MURDERED HIM WHERE DID YOU TAKE HIM!?”

“I did not do anything!”

“You b*****d.”

And then Luke knocked her out by hitting her pulse then drags her to the basement and makes her sit on a chair and ties her up.

after a few minutes she woke up.

“Hey sunshine”

“GET ME OUT OF HERE!”

“I want to kill you! But I love you so Dont worry Sweet Sugar I wont hurt or kill you even if I want to I just wanna show you something called (LOVE).”

“CHRIS IS MY SOULMATE SO I WILL NEVER LOVE YOU!”

“LET’S SEE.”

He left her there and close the lights.

She was crying for help but no one came but someone turned the light on then she met Geno and Clyde.

“Heya!”

“Oh god your bleeding!”

“Well actually we are his sides or a.k.a emotional demons some sort you actually are the reason we are created!”

“NO YOU ARE NOT REAL!”

“(SLAP) IS THAT ENOUGH TO PROVE WE ARE REAL I’M CLYDE! B!TCH IM HIS SADIST SIDE AND HE IS GENO A MASOCHIST SIDE”

“Why are you here?”

“To show you how of a b***h you are!”

She screamed of how Clyde tortured her for 4 weeks while Luke was out killing for fun because he wanted to turn her into something.

She was down there hungry and thirsty she wanted something to drink or to eat. Then after her 16th torture Luke gave her human flesh and blood she never wanted to but she snapped she had no choice she assumed human flesh as food and she wanted more of it she begged Luke to feed her more but he refused she cried and screamed pleaded even being tortured yet nothing came.

After 5 weeks she wanted nothing more than to get out of the chair she is on.

“Your still beautiful.”

“Get me off the chair I will do anything let me out of this misery.”

“Anything?”

“What do you f*cking want!? I HATE WAITING! PLEASE”

“You know what I want!”

She breaks off the ropes in so much desperation and reaches his lips she asks for more meat and gets more at the fridge she turned into a cannibal after too much trauma she just wanted to get out of the chair and do anything to get out alive so they continued killing they loved it until they met toby and masky making them a part of slendy’s proxies.

  • Quickie Sanders

    Horribly written. No punctuation and very ambiguously written

  • JDWintony

    This is a site for budding writers. As someone who’s written a lot of trash, I know I’m not one to judge and should be sympathetic and respectful.

    But this story is pretty bad.

    On the line level, it’s near-illegible. The author needs a good editor to help realize his/her vision. Maybe even bring on a co-author. I’m not sure the author has enough experience yet to really put his work out into the world, although I do respect his courage; We all have to start somewhere.

    As a narrative, it’s pretty disgusting. It seems too close to self-insert revenge fantasy writing. The poor victims have eerily specific names which furthers my fear it’s written about real people.

    The dialogue is choppy and cliche. It’s hard to know who’s talking and when. In my personal opinion, a writer should never resort to caps lock to communicate emotion.

    The story is something else. An Incell loner is angry a girl won’t date him so he kills her boyfriend who “bullied and beat” him from the first grade through college (which, wow, anyone who’s still getting physically bullied that late in life might just deserve it. If semi-mature adults still want to beat someone up I can only imagine what kind of person that must be. I think the story justifies my opinion some). Then he kidnaps the girl, “tortures” her in his basement using undescribed methods all to convince her to “love” him (and I hope we can all appreciate the increadibly creepy stuff insinuated by those quotation marks). And, of course, he is welcomed into the Ever Expanding House of Slender.

    Don’t get me wrong, this story is creepy. But not, I suspect, for the reasons the writer intended.

    The Sadist-Masochist characters are an interesting phenomenon with some potential for exploration/development (it worked well for Hellraiser). However, they’re severely underused in the work. The “Sadist” never has his work fully described. The “Masochist” recieves almost no attention at all. The main character certainly enjoys inflicting pain, but doesn’t noticeably recieve any.

    Oh, he’s also a spree killer which is a detail I feel the author needs to expand upon. That isn’t a line you can just throw in and leave alone.

    The Love of a Sadist was an interesting experiment, but I think the author needs to revisit the drawing board.

    0/3

  • IronMosquito

    AND THEN SLENDY AND MASKY WERE REALLY HAPPY TO HAVE NEW PROXIES THE END