Dr. Needles

I woke up early one morning, made myself some coffee and decided to turn on the t.v. As I flipped through the channels I stopped at one that had a special news report. I listened to the reporter talk about car crashes and things. Then another reporter came on and said something that really got my attention. ‘The dreaded serial killer Dr. Needles is now leaving for his execution by the electric chair. As you can see many victims families have come to see this event…’ I turned the t.v. off after that. I didn’t need to hear what he had done. I was there. I saw what happened. It happened fifteen years ago, but even with therapy I can still remember the whole horror like it was yesterday.

I was heading home after a long day at work, and while I was walking I felt a sharp pain in my neck and passed out. When I woke up I was strapped to a gurney! As I looked around to get my bearings lights turned on and I was blinded.

Once my eyes adjusted a man came in giggling. I also saw other victims strapped to gurneys. The man was dressed like a doctor, but he had syringes all over his face and body! He also kept syringes held in his hair! As he looked at me and the other victims he giggled and said, “Welcome patients. My name is Dr. Needles. Alright, alright. Who’s ready for their appointment?”

He then grabbed a gurney and put the victim in the middle of the room so we would be forced to watch him do whatever he wanted to the victim. He walked up to her and said, “I can tell you haven’t been eating the right kind of foods, but we can fix that.” Dr. Needles giggled as he brought out what looked like an old fashioned stomach pump! As he was testing the pump he said, “They have an old saying. What goes down must come up.” He shoved the tube down the woman’s throat and turned on the machine. While the pump was running he said, “I know, I know. It s***s.” Then he pushed a button and it was cutting her insides! Once he turned the machine off the woman was dead. We all cried and screamed as the doctor just giggled.

When he was done he pulled a loaded syringe out of his messy hair and said, “Who else is ready for their appointment?” As he grabbed another gurney the man strapped to it struggled as he screamed, “No, no, no, no, no,no, NO!” The doctor gave him a shot to calm him down. When the man woke up Dr. Needles walked up to him and said, “These things happen when you neglect your regular checkups. Fortunately, a good physician always has the right instrument for the job. Now, now this won’t hurt a bit.” He took his long instrument and shoved it up the man’s nose! We all heard a cracking sound and we knew that the instrument went right into his skull. While we were screaming Dr. Needles looked up the man’s nose and said, “Hmm, I think I found the problem.” He took both dead bodies out of the room. While he was gone I managed to loosen my straps and get free.

Once I got the other victims free we all ran off. While we were trying to find a way out we were also trying to keep quiet. Unfortunately, Dr. Needles came out and saw us! As er ran he yelled, “I haven’t discharged you!!” We all ran for our lives! Everyone found a way out, but I decided to stay behind and help catch him for the cops.

I set up some traps and I finally figured I was in a run-down hospital. After he set off a few traps he found me! Before he could do anything to me he passed out and I tied him up.

I ran outside to find a working phone and I remembered I still had my cellphone. I called the police and I waited for them. Whenever Dr. Needles woke up I’d grab a syringe from his hair and knock him out. Once the police got there they told me about more murders and that they were after him for years. After they got my testimony they took me home. Now that Dr. Needles was going to die I  figured the nightmare was over. At least, that’s what I thought until I went for a walk and found a syringe along with the sound of rustling in the bushes.

  • Alissa Isley

    Seems like it was written in a rush,it could use some improvement

    • Laura Anderson

      I like it just the way I wrote it. I wouldn’t change a thing.

      • Sami Barnes

        Well that isn’t really a good way to go about things. It’s not wrong to have confidence but you should be open to criticism so you could improve your writing.

    • Keisha Taylor

      I agree. A little illogical in places as well. Why did the doctor pass out? Did I miss it?

    • alissaisley 5++

  • Sami Barnes

    This seems a little rush, but it has potential. Maybe don’t go with a cliché serial killer.

  • Rayn

    It wasn’t bad, an enjoyable short story in my opinion. Keep up the good work.