Anna

It was stormy outside.

Well I was babysitting a girl named Anna. She seemed normal. Her parents were paying me 10 dollars an hour. So it gets late and I put her to bed. As I walk by, the restroom door was open and I could see my reflection. When I get her to bed, I go back to use the restroom. As I open the door, Anna screams in her bed and said, “The lady from the mirror came under my bed.” Of course I checked under the bed and saw nothing. When I got back up I saw a lady wearing a ripped up black dress with her eyes all black and mouth open twice as much as a normal persons jaw. She was just standing on the opposite side of the bed and I grabbed Anna and got out of the room. I close and lock the door and ask Anna what was that. Anna says the mean lady from the mirror. I called the police and they didn’t believe me but they came to investigate that night.

We stayed at my house but still, she followed her on the ride to my house. She was in the front seat in the mirror. You could see the woman and she had blood in her eyes, mouth, and ears. “Now she will kill,” said Anna. I drifted and got out with Anna. We ran to the next street where my house was. We finally got there. I struggled to get my keys out. Finally we got in. I locked all the doors we hide in my closet. She bursts through the door and I say s**t softly. She screams, “ANNA!” in a very angry tone. Then Anna says, “She gets angry when I ignore her.” I got so scared. I cried on the inside. I finally get the courage to get out and deal with it. I say, “F**k this s**t imma kill you,” and I get out my small pocket knife and stab her in her heart. She died. Well I thought she did…

Four months later

I go in my restroom and see her behind me. I turn around and smack the complete s**t out of her that got her so pissed off. I would have died that night if I my dad didn’t come in and shot her hand. He held her down her, I got scared. I called a priest. He came and ordered for the bad spirit of hell to compel of this young woman’s body and leave me and family alone or he will call upon the power of god to strike her down with a light. She turned into ashes. We called the police but they wouldn’t believe us again. We tried to convince them but no, the body was gone. The priest left. We thought she left. The spirit still lived. She was tormented and now she wants to let all that anger out. We put crosses in our hands and read from the bible and we turned out the lights and came with candles. We wished for her spirit let free and she left.

  • Alice150

    This story keeps jumping from past tense to present tense.

  • JustAnotherSoul

    If she ran outside of the room how did she lock the door from the other side. You could say it was a weird door that locks from the other side, but at that point it would be lazy writing, and I have already seen enough of that in this story. There were countless grammatical errors and run-on sentences. The idea of the story was very plain. A killer comes out of a mirror and chases a babysitter. All of you have to agree that that’s a pretty overused idea. Try to create something out of the ordinary and don’t be afraid to think about it. I usually spend days on end thinking about a good topic to write about. Reading your writing, you sound pretty young. If you can have, have somebody proof read your writing before you upload it. Good luck on your future writings:)