A Meet I Will Never Forget (part 2)

After I killed my family, Slendy teleported us to what looked like an old, run down mansion. I stared in disbelief at the beautiful mansion. “I thought the mansion was just a legend!” Jeff started speaking. “Nope, it’s real kid.” They led me into the mansion where the other pastas were waiting. They all looked at me and stared. I started to get nervous with all the attention on me. A boy I knew to be Ben started asking questions. “Who’s that? Why have you brought a human here? Does she like games?” Eyeless Jack interrupted his questions. “This is a new edition to the family. If you have any questions about her, ask her yourself.” They started crowding around me with questions. Thanks a lot EJ. I’m not the type of person who loves crowds. “SIT DOWN AND RAISE YOUR HAND IF YOU HAVE A QUESTION!” I was screaming at the top of my lungs. They all sat back down and raised their hands hesitantly. “Ben.” “Do you like games?” “I love games Ben.” “How do you know my name?” I had forgotten to tell them that I’ve read all of their stories and seen pictures of them online. “Oh yeah. I forgot to mention that I’ve read all of your stories.” They were very surprised. Sally spoke up. “All of them?” I thought she was cute. It was hard to imagine an 8 year old girl as a killer. “Yes Sally, even yours.” I smiled at her. She smiled back at me. “Yes, Offenderman.” Offenderman smirked and pulled out a rose. “Would you like a rose?” He extended it out to me. “Nope.” “But, why!?” “Because like I just said, I’ve read all of your stories. I know what happens when you give a rose to someone.” Offenderman frowned and mumbled under his breath. The others laughed. “Okay who’s next?” “Ooh me! Me!” Jeff practically yelled. I laughed at his persistence. “Yes, Jeff.” “Do you like knives? And what is your opinion on killing?” “If I had to choose a weapon, I would definitely choose a knife. My second choice would be a pistol. As for killing, I don’t really mind it, especially when they deserve it.” Hoodie seemed to be satisfied that my second option would be a pistol. “LJ.” LJ laughed and stood up. “Do you like candy?” I should have known that was coming. “Yes LJ, I love candy.” “Would you like some candy?” “No thank you. Polite pass.” LJ looked kind of hurt when I declined, but he tried to hide it with a smile. I felt bad for declining it, but I still didn’t fully trust them yet. I wanted to get to know them first before I accepted anything from them. I must have zoned out, because Jeff was waving his hand in front of my face trying to get my attention. “Hello? Anyone in there?” “Oh! I’m sorry. I guess I just spaced out.” EJ decided that was enough questions. “Alright, I think that’s enough questions for today.” I was getting very tired. I yawned loudly and rubbed my eyes. Everyone turned to look at me. Everyone was wondering where I would sleep. Sally spoke up with excitement in her voice. “She can sleep in my room! I have an extra bed in there.” All the others agreed. Masky spoke up this time. “Yeah, just until we get a room fixed up for her.” “Thank you Sally. I’m very grateful.” I was relieved somewhat, because I didn’t want to be rude. I still didn’t trust them yet. I followed Sally to her room. Her door was decorated with bloody pink flowers. When we got inside the room, I saw that her walls were a pale pink with blood splatters. Hanging on her walls were many drawn pictures of the Creepypasta family. She was a very good artist for an 8 year old. “You’re a very good artist. Those pictures are amazing!” Sally smiled at my words. “Thank you. I’m not as good as Bloody Painter though. He’s the best artist here. Here’s the bed you will be sleeping on. I’m so happy to have someone sleeping in my room with me! The only one who comes over sometimes is Lazari.” I feel bad for Sally. It must get so lonely in here by herself. “After my room is finished I could sleep over sometimes.” Sally smiled and looked at me with hope in her eyes. “Really?” “Really.” “And will you play with me?” I smiled warmly at her. “Absolutely.” She jumped up and down with excitement. “Yay! I can’t wait!” “Would you like me to tuck you in and read you a story Sally?” “Yes please! I would like to listen to a story about your family if you don’t mind.” “It’s fine. I’ll tell you about the time we got a puppy.” Sally eagerly got into her bed. “I love puppies! They’re so cute.” “One day I was sitting in my room playing with my dolls and my parents were excited about something. I walked out of my room to my parents’ room to see what they were talking about. When I asked them, they both shouted that we were getting a puppy. I was so happy I ran around the house squealing with excitement. My parents decided to let me pick the dog. I ran into the pet store checking out all of the dogs. I set my sights on the cutest chocolate brown puppy with short floppy ears. He had the most beautiful brown eyes. And he was just as sweet as can be. We decided from that day, to call him Brownie.” When I finished my story, I looked over to find Sally fast asleep. I chuckled and got into my own bed. I had one last thought as I fell asleep, ‘I wonder what tomorrow will bring.’

  • Tessa

    I am really starting to like this series! I just love creepypasta fanfictions but its really hard for me to find one I really like to keep my interest but this one definitely has! You will always have my vote. About the characters falling in love thing, that would be a great idea! For as of who should fall in love, I have no idea… Sorry.๐Ÿ˜•

    • wawe

      NO NOT GOOD IDEA

      • Tessa

        Please commenting to everyone and explain why you don’t think its not a good idea.

        • wawe

          Cause love things are so common in stories XD

  • Sonya Hernandez

    I think she should fall in love with Jeff, but have Ticcy Toby fall for her๐Ÿ˜ŠHELL YEAHHH

    • wawe

      NO EW

      • wawe

        We dont need more of Jeff x ? Ticci x ? NO nothibg if that plz

    • Markthekiller

      Yes!!!

  • Nightfury King

    Ben X Sally and E.J. X main character

    • Pilar

      I agree with this๐Ÿ˜ƒ

    • wawe

      NONONONONO AND NO AGAIN

  • MissMay

    Ticcy Toby should fall in love with her.. If you decide to add him and if you don’t offenderman

    • wawe

      FOR F***SAKE

      • Sonya Hernandez

        What do you think then???

        • wawe

          No no and no we cant have ppl falling in love everywhere

          • Sonya Hernandez

            Imig /:
            If that’s how you feel

  • Dan

    Don’t make anyone fall in love. They are murderous psychopaths. Psychopaths don’t feel love therefore none of them should be able to love. Except for some like slendy who aren’t even human

    • wawe

      Yes I agree w u, thx 4 having someone on my side

  • Bella Trevino

    Ej and the main character

    • wawe

      NO

  • wawe

    Nononononononononononono

    • Netor Ananab

      Calm down! Who even cares about my opinion?! Jesus Christ!

  • wawe

    Plz dont make anyone fall in love w anyone, everyone does this to their stories and only if u have a rlly good Idea I might let you write something but only if u get a rlly good Idea!! Its to easy to ruin a story beacuse of adding stuff such as this! If you dont happen to have a rlly good Idea I can give u a tip, dont make the love happen between an already existing pasta, we wanna read something new here…

    • Megan

      I respect your opinion, but please stop commenting on other people’s votes. Everyone has their own opinion. I will think about what you said. I still haven’t decided yet so don’t worry. I’m still waiting on more votes.

      • wawe

        Sry I overreacted but I just get mad sometimes about small things…

        • Megan

          I understand. I see where you’re going with your opinion. I just need more time to think. And more votes to help me think this through.

  • ThePuppet

    Maybe you should make something related with killing cuz’ psychos kills for love with someon system elimination. Kill or be killed ?

  • Simon

    What’s worse than a ridiculous self-insert fanfiction about popular creepypasta characters? Its equally ridiculous, yet somehow pretty dull and boring continuation.
    Seriously, there’s a pretty obvious difference between a creepypasta and a fanfiction. I’d try and learn what it is if I was you.

    • Megan

      If you didn’t like it, then just say so. ๐Ÿ˜ง I said the story would get better as it progresses. I know the difference between a Creepypasta and a fan fiction. If you don’t like this then don’t read it.

      • Simon

        Here’s a better suggestion: if someone doesn’t like your story, see what their complaints are, take them into account and try to improve. Don’t go around explaining them how the story’s gonna get better as it goes along and how they don’t have to read it.

        • Megan

          Fine then, how would you suggest I make it better, for the 3rd part?

          • Simon

            First off, make it creepy. This is, after all, a creepypasta. What is it doing here otherwise?

            Don’t have your story be in parts just because you can’t/don’t want to write it all in one go. Each part has to have it’s own arch with a proper beginning, middle and end, while also progressing the overarching plot. Otherwise you’ll just get parts where nothing interesting happens and we just follow the protagonist go from point A to point B so the overarching story can progress. It would be like an Avatar: The Last Airbender episode where we just watch the gang fly on Appa and do nothing for the whole thing.

            Do something creative. You have the main characters of a ton of popular creepypastas all gathered up in a mansion and a love drama is what you’re going for? Come on, anyone can do better than that. Plus, there are at least a dozen love stories written about each even mildly popular creepypasta character on the internet. Everything”s already been done.

          • Simon

            First off, make it creepy. This is, after all, a creepypasta. What is it doing here otherwise?

            Don’t have your story be in parts just because you can’t/don’t want to write it all in one go. Each part has to have it’s own arch with a proper beginning, middle and end, while also progressing the overarching plot. Otherwise you’ll just get parts where nothing interesting happens and we just follow the protagonist go from point A to point B so the overarching story can progress. It would be like an Avatar: The Last Airbender episode where we just watch the gang fly on Appa and do nothing for the whole thing.

            Do something creative. You have the main characters of a ton of popular creepypastas all gathered up in a mansion and a love drama is what you’re going for? Come on, anyone can do better than that. Plus, there are at least a dozen love stories written about each even mildly popular creepypasta character on the internet. Everything in that…”style of story” has already been done.

          • Megan

            Actually I have decided not to make anyone fall in love, except EJ and his kidneys, and Jeff and his knife, and LJ and his candy…well, you get the point. I wish I could tell you what I’ve got in store for the next part, but it would spoil it for everyone else. Thank you for the advice. This is my first time making a series tbh. The first part was the first time I’ve ever written a story before.

          • Netor Ananab

            Wow, you have some great thoughts. You should probably post a story. ๐Ÿ‘

          • Simon

            Make the whole thing believable. You’re not even trying here. The whole scenario is completely ridiculous: a bunch of unrelated creepypasta characters that act nothing like their actual selves, all live together in a mansion and are completely happy to have some random girl, that has killed her parents for no reason whatsoever and than has pretty much forgotten about it almost instantly, join them. I could maybe suspend my disbelief in the first part, if only because its premise sounded like a bad joke (Slenderman, Jeff The Killer and Eyeless Jack walk into a bar…), but this part just had the characters talking, so it gets pretty unbelievable as well as boring.

            Speaking of characters, make your protagonist (and everyone else in the cast, for that matter) interesting. I honestly can’t come up with a description of her or her personality. She’s that dull and uninteresting.
            Good characters aren’t perfect Mary Sues, they have different flaws and stuff. Their growth as characters and their slow shift in personality towards better or worse as the story progresses is what’s memorable and interesting to people. Your character doesn’t really have that. She hasn’t screwed something up because of her personality, she hasn’t learned anything, she has nothing defining her and her personality. The most she’s done is kill her family for no reason, but that’s been quickly swept under the rug and forgotten. In fact, I don’t even think that affected her or anyone else emotionally at all.

          • Simon

            All in all, I see 2 ways the story could go that would make it somewhat intriguing if done properly. The first is to focus on the protagonist’s one trait she’s kinda displayed in part 1 – naivety. You could have the other characters make her to progressively worse things and show her growing reluctance of whether she actually really wants to do these things and be with these people. Unfortunately, you’ve already raised the bar pretty high right from the get go with her killing her family. Considering her reaction then, going with this story would be pretty inconsistent with her being fine with killing her parents, but feeling bad for whatever you have her do.
            The other option would be to go in the oposite direction. Have her get progresivly more psychtic, to the point where she surpassed the other characters in aggression and turns against them. The problem with this one is that it’s kinda silly and making the whole thing creepy will be pretty difficult. You’d also have to have all other characters be likeable, and that means they’ll have to be much different than their original versions, which will further degrade the average reader’s suspension of disbelief.
            Basically, don’t go with a love story. It’s not creepy, it’s rarely interesting and it’s definitely been done before.

  • Megan

    Alright, I have decided not to make anyone fall in love. Except EJ and his kidneys๐Ÿ˜‚.

  • Tessa

    Alright, so I previously posted a comment but I didn’t know who should fall in love. In my opinion, I think ej and main character should fall in love. ๐Ÿ™‚

  • Megan

    Maybe he still will…you’ll never know~~๐Ÿ˜Œ

  • Lonewolf111

    Hi I luv ur stories especially dis series but I think u should know that their all psychotic killers living in a mansion so no one should luv each other except from their wepons and that if this much pasta’s living in a mansion there hast to be some beef(fights). Ur character is rlly dull and un explained maybe on of the pasta’s should use her for their advantage like say if jeff hates jack he could peer pressure her into insanity or to kill jack. PS can u explain the main character more in the next book.

  • Rose ThePainter

    Love this, keep doing these please.

  • Nicole {Neko}

    Once again, LOVE IT!!! XD but one question, what does it mean when Offender gives someone a rose?

  • Mason Heimsoth

    We n33d more

  • KittyKitty Cat

    This series is amazing!!!!!!!!!!!! Please do more!

  • May

    So much better than the first one. U go ๐Ÿ˜Š

  • platinum and gold

    Part 3!?!?!?

  • Aya

    Make Jeff the killer fall for her!!! Plzzzzzzzzzzzzz

  • Nai Gudino

    I need a part 3 ๐Ÿ˜

  • Ace Baron

    Amazing pice of art